The problem is not "poor word choices" or "making key concepts more precise." It is the complete omission of the Christ, the cross, and the mercy of God from a presentation of the gospel.

I'm ignoring much of what you're saying, because it's not relevant. The topics at hand seems to be the Christ, the cross, and the mercy of God. If you have something to say about those -- instead of "what is important in evangelical churches (which apparently, if one is to go by your comments, is something other than the Christ, the cross, and the mercy of God) -- I am all ears.